My love for you is like a butterfly. It appears to give you rise. And suddenly, without a reason why, It leaves right before your eyes. But you have no reason to be crying, Inside, I'm sorry, I'm slowly dying.
My love for you is like a winter breeze. Whispering softly in your right ear. Blowing in you, putting you at ease. Hiding my pain, making it seem sincere. But no need to feel like dying, Inside I'm sobbing, Inside I'm crying.
And when
"If you think this poem isn't complete, think again. That's all that I wrote. I wrote this from when I believe to be the end of my junior year of high school ( the beginning of March). This is evidence because on the piece of paper I wrote it on, I penciled in at the top right "beginning of March," so I'd know when I wrote it if I ever looked back on it. I'm going to destroy the original, which reveals a few changes/mistakes at the beginning of the 8th, 9th, and 10th lines. It's a very ugly poem, to say the least about it. There isn't anything I like about it, and it doesn't seem to show the feeling that caused me to write it. Oh well. Lost poetry."
Isaac D.
posted by: specter (reply)
post date: 09.21.04 (9:20 pm)
theres no such thing as an "ugly poem" becuz everyone has their own views of what poetry is like. if u look at my stuff, which on tblog is mostly songs, ull notice the differences im talking about.
posted by: Isaac (reply)
post date: 09.21.04 (9:26 pm)
Reply to: specter
But as the author, do I not have the right to declare the poem of my own hands to be ugly?
posted by: Dariana (reply)
post date: 09.22.04 (1:32 am)
Sometimes "lost poetry" is the best. It can take us back to another time. I love coming across my old poems. Sometimes I revamp them and sometimes I realize I like them better now then I did when I first wrote them. Gotta tell you though Issac, I love your "ugly" poem. From my view, it rather stunning. :-)
no i like this, its real, and raw, and it shows change of emotion, it is easy to relate to, id would flesh out the end a bit, maybe When did i write it , what could i have been thinking, your are still alive you didnt die right, so that some stuff to play with have fun. =)
